经济依附人在职证明这样写可以吗

To: Germany Embassy
Dear Officer,
We hereby certify that xx (Female, born on xx/xx/xxxx) has been employed by our company as 职务since xx/xx/xxxx. Her monthly income is XXX RMB.
Her daughter xxx, hold of passport No. Exxxx will be on travelling purpose visiting your country and some other Schengen countries from xx/xx/2014 to xx/xx/2014.All the expense during this trip will be covered by xx.
We would be very grateful if you would approve xxx’s application for a visitor visa. Should you have any question, please do not hesitate to contact us.